I have to thank Julia for the challenge this week, because I have been completely blocked, but as usual her challenge broke through a little. Please visit other people’s contribution, and join the challenge yourself.
Photograph by Steve Kramer http://taochild.wordpress.com/
The rain turned the road into a river, and washed away any possibility of return. Rebecca did not care. She pulled her hood off and looked up, allowing the chilly drops to cleanse away the memories. Someday, she was sure, they would rebuild the road, but she would be long gone. Thanks to the storm, not even the Tracker would be able to follow. Every trace of her departure would be washed away down the road. They might even think that the flood had swallowed her. Rebecca smiled as she covered her head again, and turned away from the flood toward her destiny ahead.
Jul 16, 2012 @ 16:22:39
Love the way the unknown here feels so full of possibility! Such an evocative image–the road washed away.
Hugs,
Kathy
Jul 16, 2012 @ 17:21:34
That was the prompt, but it prompted me in a very evocative way.
Jul 16, 2012 @ 16:23:18
And the detail about covering her head is pitch perfect.
Jul 16, 2012 @ 17:21:58
Thank you. I worked hard on those details. I feel good about this one.
Jul 16, 2012 @ 17:31:35
Now this has the potential for more. I really like it because although it is about devastation it is also about cleansing. Excellent mixture in the one piece!
Jul 16, 2012 @ 17:33:29
Thanks Julia. I just have to remember to link it when the link goes live. It does have potential, but I have no idea where it came from or where it is going.
Jul 16, 2012 @ 20:23:07
I can see that in another light, she might want to go back, but somehow I feel it’s best that the road is gone now. That tracker sounds ominous and I’m glad she’s getting away.
I agree with Julia.
Jul 16, 2012 @ 20:34:54
I think she is moving towards something really wonderful.
Jul 16, 2012 @ 23:04:57
Great un-blocking, Lisa.
Jul 17, 2012 @ 09:15:53
Thanks, Andra. I brief moment of un-blockage.
Jul 17, 2012 @ 01:31:18
I do like the way you turn a potential disaster into a godsend.
Jul 17, 2012 @ 09:15:32
Thank you Miriam. I’m trying to see the world that way, that negative can be positive if you only look at things differently.
Jul 17, 2012 @ 07:24:23
Loved this. What I liked about it so much was its sense of freedom – now that the rain has masked her identity her persuer, she now has the world at her feet.
Jul 17, 2012 @ 09:14:24
That’s what I was hoping for, to create a sense of possibility and freedom even in a time of flood. Thank you for your comment.
Jul 17, 2012 @ 09:44:08
Want to know more…
Jul 17, 2012 @ 19:53:52
LOL, me too. We shall see . . .
Jul 17, 2012 @ 15:02:59
Lovely emotional piece which turns misfortune on its head and gives hope. Well written.
Jul 17, 2012 @ 19:51:51
Thank you so much.
Jul 17, 2012 @ 15:27:35
I also love the hood, it adds great imagery to this lovely piece.
Jul 17, 2012 @ 19:51:27
Thank you so much. This teaches me to pay close attention to details.
Jul 18, 2012 @ 01:43:45
Yes! if you read people like Murakami and Rushdie they are packed with little details that bring stories alive!
Jul 17, 2012 @ 16:34:56
it would be lovely to disappear like this some days…nicely done!
Jul 17, 2012 @ 19:51:07
I think part of me wishes I could. Thank you for your comment.
Jul 18, 2012 @ 14:44:52
Very effective job of sketching the background – we don’t know much, but just enough to imagine why she’s running away. Nice. (And I like the way she smiles to realize they’ll think she drowned. No love lost there!)
Jul 18, 2012 @ 16:16:39
Thanks. I’m glad you can fill in some of the blanks with imagination.
Jul 19, 2012 @ 12:48:20
Very mysterious! Makes me wonder why she is disappearing.
Jul 19, 2012 @ 13:28:43
I’m wondering myself. I’ll let you all know if I figure it out.
Jul 19, 2012 @ 14:00:56
A great feeling of relief and calm here. Very atmospheric.
Jul 19, 2012 @ 14:26:21
Thank you. Calm after the storm instead of before.
Jul 20, 2012 @ 19:38:42
An image formed asI read that. A little scene in a cloud. Nicely done!! And sorry I have not checked in in a while!
Jul 21, 2012 @ 10:20:19
No worries.
Jul 21, 2012 @ 16:42:33
Very nicely written. She’s very lucky, isn’t she?
Jul 24, 2012 @ 12:51:53
That remains to be seen, but I thin kshe is.
Jul 21, 2012 @ 17:23:52
Lovely story. I love the line ‘Every trace of her departure would be washed away down the road.’ It’s very reassuring, calming. I want to know more about the tracker though!
Jul 22, 2012 @ 12:39:48
Thank you. This might be one that I explore in a longer format.
Jul 22, 2012 @ 15:56:14
oooh will look out for it!
Jul 22, 2012 @ 13:59:52
And off she goes into the wild blue yonder.
I too would like to see this story expanded upon, as to what exactly drives this poor girl to walk away.
Jul 22, 2012 @ 15:17:15
It is definitely on my list. I promise.
Jul 24, 2012 @ 12:50:11
Given the number of requests for more, I will definitely have to explore this story further.