The Box (100WCGU)

This week 100 word challenge from Julia is very British, but I went a different route.

It came special delivery with a simple note attached in handwriting she had not seen except in the letters her mother had kept. Love letters, from her father, a man who left Cindy long ago. A man she would rather forget.

“I’m sorry,” the note said, attached to the red box.

The small box was heavy and cool, made out of material that Cindy could not identify.

She tried to hide it away in a closet, but it seemed to call to her.  She pulled it out and placed it on the mantle, where she intentionally ignored it.

Until the night it glowed.

Update: I continued the story in a different post if you want to learn more.

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31 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Taochild
    Mar 19, 2012 @ 20:02:21

    Ooooh! You’re not gonna leave us hanging with this ne are you? :D


  2. Kathryn McCullough
    Mar 19, 2012 @ 20:46:10

    Love the exchange with Steve, too damn funny! Perhaps, since I thought the same thing when the post ended. However, your come back is hysterical, Lisa!


  3. Julie Goucher
    Mar 20, 2012 @ 03:13:05

    This week’s pieces have been full of mystery and curiosity…..


  4. jfb57
    Mar 20, 2012 @ 04:07:48

    Wow – now where can this take us I wonder! I love the establishment of the character in so few words. Have you decided what’s in the box yet?


  5. annahalford (@anhalf)
    Mar 20, 2012 @ 11:20:36

    Another mystery; love it. I thought lots would do a financial theme, but so far have only read a couple that did (it far better than I could!)
    I really liked this- interesting to have the box glowing; leaves lots of questions hanging.


  6. Sparks In Shadow
    Mar 20, 2012 @ 16:20:58

    Love it! But in regard to that first conversation in the comments: you have to try! Even if you just tie it up in one more 100 word story. Remember in a fantasy story, it can be anything you want. I hope you’ll try. :)


  7. ventahl
    Mar 21, 2012 @ 10:06:04

    Keeps me on the edge. Great! :)


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  9. Bod for tea
    Mar 22, 2012 @ 02:52:13

    Ooo exciting! I want to know more!


  10. Sandra
    Mar 22, 2012 @ 07:54:51

    A whole back-story with an enticement for the rest, in just a few words. Great.


  11. 4amWriter
    Mar 22, 2012 @ 13:58:07

    So, next week will we find out why it’s glowing? :)


  12. benzeknees
    Mar 22, 2012 @ 18:55:55

    Love it Lisa! As usual you have us hooked with just a few words. Maybe if you forced yourself to complete some of these starts, it would keep your brain focused instead of wandering (prior post).
    This one would be a good serial, building on this first post through other challenges. I can’t wait to see what you do with this!


  13. Susan Mann (@susankmann)
    Mar 23, 2012 @ 12:20:16

    ooh love this, I want to know more.


  14. Let's CUT the Crap!
    Mar 24, 2012 @ 12:37:45

    Such a mysterious box! I wonder why it glowed. Good suspense.


  15. Michael Fishman
    Mar 26, 2012 @ 11:01:41

    A beautiful, although sad, story. There’s a lot of power in that box and to me, I think Cindy is going to open it up.


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